English : revision : narrative writing

Today we have dissolved into groups.
Each group looked at their pieces of work and compared them to the list we created earlier in the week.
The purpose of the exercise is to learn to recognise errors in the writing and to make suggestions as to how a piece of work could be improved.
we need to learn to use description to expand our narrative; adding in adverbs and adjectives, opportunities for the use of similes... etc.

We dealt with the writing one paragraph at a time and slowly improved the whole piece.

The new piece was re-written for comparison and presentation before moving on to the next student's piece of work