English : Narrative writing (3)

Completion of second and third paragraphs of the narrative begun
yesterday. Add conclusion.
All children received 1:1 feedback on paragraph 1.
Issues arising were:
was/were
here/hear
were/where
capitalisation of proper nouns
Punctuation before inverted commas
new speaker new line for direct speech
commas between items in a list
commas between adjectives
use of weak adjectives - big, nice, lovely
for one or two - staying on track on plan